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Tim J Brennan
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Re: Neighbors

Post by Tim J Brennan » Wed Jan 15, 2020 4:28 am

Sharon Leigh wrote:
Tue Jan 14, 2020 12:37 am
An excellent study, its all there in its gritty glory. Always enjoy your pen, never over-written, but focused in the best way. I didn't see it pre-edit but as it stands now it's powerfully ended on the tactile slap of paper in calloused palm. Bravo

Glad you can visualize the calloused palm and the propensity for violence., Sharon. Like a word like "tactile" in seeing what's not said. Very encouraging to me as a writer. 

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Re: Neighbors

Post by Dave » Thu Jan 16, 2020 6:55 pm

Hey Tim 
By the way, strictly speaking this syntax is misleading since it implies that the door is haunted - He, skeletal, robed, moves to a door almost
haunted,...
Dave

Tim J Brennan
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Re: Neighbors

Post by Tim J Brennan » Thu Jan 16, 2020 8:16 pm

Dave wrote:
Thu Jan 16, 2020 6:55 pm
Hey Tim 
By the way, strictly speaking this syntax is misleading since it implies that the door is haunted - He, skeletal, robed, moves to a door almosthaunted,...
Dave

Thanks, Dave. You're always helpful.

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