I love this strange short poem, Tracy. I did not know Monte Hall had such a wish. (Shakespeare, not Lets Make a Deal? As if.)
The poem's rueful tone is well done, understated. I'm not sure the final line is needed, though. I very much enjoyed the read.
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Re: Better Than This
Thanks Trish for the kind words.
I chuckle because invariably Tom Riordon's comment to me was 'cut the last line'.
Of course he was usually right, and I think you are right with this as well.
T
I chuckle because invariably Tom Riordon's comment to me was 'cut the last line'.
Of course he was usually right, and I think you are right with this as well.
T