No Tears
No Tears
Over the years I've received
the gift
of an automatic food processor
on three occasions.
One I re-gifted to a friend
the other two
sold at the neighborhood garage sale.
I can reduce
a whole onion to mush on a hand grater
with my eyes closed
and not skin my fingers.
the gift
of an automatic food processor
on three occasions.
One I re-gifted to a friend
the other two
sold at the neighborhood garage sale.
I can reduce
a whole onion to mush on a hand grater
with my eyes closed
and not skin my fingers.
- Tracy Mitchell
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Re: No Tears
Beautiful, Indar.
Food processor = life experience processor, I think.
I absorb this poem very well without the explanatory closing stanza. Without, the poem opens in a better way, I think. JMO.
Cheers.
T
Food processor = life experience processor, I think.
I absorb this poem very well without the explanatory closing stanza. Without, the poem opens in a better way, I think. JMO.
Cheers.
T
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Fab poem Linda.
I can identify.
Other people will always be a problem...regardless of their intentions
Never blame yourself
I can identify.
Other people will always be a problem...regardless of their intentions
Never blame yourself
Re: No Tears
Linda - how elegantly simple yet loaded. Very nice.
Aj
Aj
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Thank you all for the read and your comments,
Tracy, I nixed the last S and, as usual, it seems truncated to me but I will revisit it later to see if the phantom pain has subsided. Most often it does.
Colm, as they say in the South: bless their hearts, they meant well.
Aj, thank you for appreciating simplicity, I sometimes wonder if that tendency in my writing comes off as too plain.
Tracy, I nixed the last S and, as usual, it seems truncated to me but I will revisit it later to see if the phantom pain has subsided. Most often it does.
Colm, as they say in the South: bless their hearts, they meant well.
Aj, thank you for appreciating simplicity, I sometimes wonder if that tendency in my writing comes off as too plain.
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Indar - It occurs to me after reading AJ's comments and your response that I don't comment enough on what AJ calls the elegant simplicity of your expression. He is spot-on with the emphasis on 'elegant'. My opinion is the source of that elegant simplicity is the clarity of thought with which you write -- you know what you want to say, and you know how to use language. Don't ever question that.
T
T
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Hey Indar
I am in full agreement with Tracy and AJ on this one and on your writing in general, which has such a warmth and generosity of spirit that any attempt to add unnecessary complexity would spoil its humanity. I agree too that the last stanza is out of line with the rest even though it would truncate the poem.
Dave
I am in full agreement with Tracy and AJ on this one and on your writing in general, which has such a warmth and generosity of spirit that any attempt to add unnecessary complexity would spoil its humanity. I agree too that the last stanza is out of line with the rest even though it would truncate the poem.
Dave
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Linda, I'm not much of a poet, but I do believe strongly that the writer knows what he/she is trying to say. While the last stanza seems a bit "off", the author must ask him/herself what the point of it is. The reader takes what he/she takes - the writer knows what is meant............... where the twain shall meet ends up the question.
Personally, poetry is art, an expression. The artist puts it on a canvas/paper, and the viewers and readers view and read.
Love your writings... simple, elegant, straightforward.............
Aj
Personally, poetry is art, an expression. The artist puts it on a canvas/paper, and the viewers and readers view and read.
Love your writings... simple, elegant, straightforward.............
Aj
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Thank you to all for the kind comments and helpful feedback. I have now knocked off the last two stanzas and will do what I should have done in the first place---trusted the reader.
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I don't know what the original looked like, but the edited poem definitely resonates. A person has their ways. Being 'unplugged' keeps us human, individual. There is a resilience, toughness, learnt through 'hands-on' experience.
Should that be a full-stop after sale?
best
Phil
Should that be a full-stop after sale?
best
Phil