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Island Fiction
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A nice slice of island life...sounds like Heaven to my ears
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When I say Heaven I mean the idea of living on an island,
a simple life lived close to nature
a simple life lived close to nature
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Re: Island Fiction
Matty11 wrote: ↑Thu Dec 26, 2019 9:06 pmHi Matty, love the word choices and sonics here. A musical treat! Thanks!
I could murder a cuppa hangover?
mutters a knitting voice,
her claws purling patterns
the Fair Isle way. love the knitting metaphor. Assume purling is the verb, had to read it a couple of times in the dense economy to be sure.
The kettle whistles, the brew
as warming as a jumper - not sure I'm inside this simile. not sure if I lose it at warming or jumper. I am a landlover... Never mind got it on the third.
outside gulls rock and roll
drunk on a burgundy sky.
The winged ways gleam
in those full-throated, fish
-happy voices. She hears
the thrill of fraying waves. Excellent final stanza, especially the last line--thrill of fraying waves!
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Thanks for coming back Colm. Yes, the distinctions between simple and limiting have an individual consequence as are those 'progressions' outside tradition.
best
Phil
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Yes, it is Wren. Thank you for that thumbs up on the final line. A dud concluding line can kill the whole poem!Assume purling is the verb,
best
Phil
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Sleepily evocative.
Fraying waves: I would never have thought of them this way, but now you've mentioned it the image has stuck. Waves along the shoreline sometimes seem more solid than liquid, despite their movement, so fraying is a good metaphor.
Fraying waves: I would never have thought of them this way, but now you've mentioned it the image has stuck. Waves along the shoreline sometimes seem more solid than liquid, despite their movement, so fraying is a good metaphor.
I've been writing ever since I realised I could. Storytelling since I started talking. Poetry however comes and goes
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Thanks for the thumbs up on that G. I wanted that one to work to contrast with the 'binding' of knitting.
best
Phil
best
Phil