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Colm Roe
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Post by Colm Roe » Mon Apr 01, 2019 6:51 pm

30 ways to die. 
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It comes in bitter silence, 
pertinent sentences 
that roll unspoken 
inside his skull,
with no means of escape.

He staples them to each other, 
as the paper
becomes parchment

inside he tells her everything.

Running out of time and room
words expand to their own pressure,
press themselves into life, tangible 
but trapped, 
they know their destiny.

Outside she waits
knows what's inside him
senses the clicks and swells, yet
sours, more frustrated
boring imaginary holes 
in his stubborn head, while hers 
will remain 
forever intact.

 

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Post by Sharon Leigh » Mon Apr 01, 2019 7:02 pm

I love this one, Colm, its tone perfect for the subject, the sonics and syllables lending themselves well to the clipped, frustrated voice. The death of truth.

30 ways indeed! Bring them on :)

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Post by ajduclos » Tue Apr 02, 2019 4:13 am

I totally agree with Sharon - Colm, this is a gem !!!

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Post by Tracy Mitchell » Tue Apr 02, 2019 7:13 am

:D :D

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Post by indar » Tue Apr 02, 2019 11:09 am

the thread is in kind of a snarl so I'll comment here on both your entries so far--fabulous!

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Post by DocCon » Tue Apr 02, 2019 1:32 pm

Indeed, agree with everyone -- a really great piece, with a tone both mysterious and realistic, almost a magic realism.

Thanks!

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Post by Colm Roe » Wed Apr 03, 2019 7:05 pm

:)

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