Radiant Heat

[Amie]

This one, for me, went in.
I don't think you can judge whether or not something is great writing based on the opinion of one person (no offence meant to Dave at all). Not everyone likes the same thing, and I defy you to find a single piece of literature that is asmired by every single intelligent person on the planet.

[Dave]

Of course I know what great writing is: Please bow to my superior knowledge in all things. No seriously, I never think in terms of great or not and usually it is only future generations who truly get to play that game.

[Tragopandemonium]

I clicked this post - read the title and first couple of lines, and concluded that this new forum is the real deal and that I would come back to give the poem the slow attention it deserved.   Love so much about this, but I have a strong feeling that it's missing a final stanza!  Something big and beefy to balance out wonderful S1 and tie everything together.  Is that any use?

[Tim J Brennan]

I clicked this post - read the title and first couple of lines, and concluded that this new forum is the real deal and that I would come back to give the poem the slow attention it deserved.   Love so much about this, but I have a strong feeling that it's missing a final stanza!  Something big and beefy to balance out wonderful S1 and tie everything together.  Is that any use?

I would prefer you read the whole poem and then, sure, jump right in.  But gotta tell ya'...Evie was not big and beefy.  Nor balanced.  Good looking to a young person, sure.  Anything female in a bikini and all oiled up was pretty damn enticing.  

Also hard to "tie" everything together, but, maybe...   Thanks for all your thoughts.  

Welcome.