I don't want to write,
anymore.
When I bleed,
I don't flaunt it.
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retrospect
Last edited by Ike on Mon Apr 02, 2018 8:47 am, edited 1 time in total.
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Is it ntentional irony, to write a poem about not wanting to write poems? 
Not working for me at all I'm afraid.
Taking it at face value - it seems to have an in-built presumption that writing is about flaunting your pain, rather than engaging with your intended audience. If a person only writes to get all their anguish out on view, they'd be better off going into therapy, or keeping a diary.
Writing shared should offer something to the reader - poems about personal pain can do that, but you have to consider what the reader focus is (empathy? As in "dear reader, I know you've felt this way too, so I'm sharing so you feel less alone". Voyeurism? As in, "isn't my train wreck interesting to look at?" Or something else?). It's not immediately clear what this poem offers the reader.
Not working for me at all I'm afraid.
Taking it at face value - it seems to have an in-built presumption that writing is about flaunting your pain, rather than engaging with your intended audience. If a person only writes to get all their anguish out on view, they'd be better off going into therapy, or keeping a diary.
Writing shared should offer something to the reader - poems about personal pain can do that, but you have to consider what the reader focus is (empathy? As in "dear reader, I know you've felt this way too, so I'm sharing so you feel less alone". Voyeurism? As in, "isn't my train wreck interesting to look at?" Or something else?). It's not immediately clear what this poem offers the reader.
Re: retrospect
Amie,
Appreciate the reply. Yeah, the irony was certainly on purpose. In regards to the rest, you're seeing it different than I intended. I was going for vulnerability instead of pain, the metaphor was a little bit diagonal.
Appreciate the reply. Yeah, the irony was certainly on purpose. In regards to the rest, you're seeing it different than I intended. I was going for vulnerability instead of pain, the metaphor was a little bit diagonal.
Re: retrospect
Reply applies to vulnerability or any emotion, even joy. Question is still: what does this offer your reader? If it doesn't offer the reader something, why share it?
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Sure. That's a good point. What's being offered? To you, nothing. And that's okay. But to say that it doesn't offer anything to anybody because it doesn't personally resonate is brash. This piece is about the vulnerability of sharing one's ideas, written or otherwise. You even mentioned other emotions could be included. Perhaps the irony is a metaphor for overcoming one's fear. In that way it shares hope, or even courage, if that's what the reader is looking for. Perhaps it's more straight forward and shows empathy towards the reader, scared to say what they think. Perhaps it is about pain. Perhaps it isn't. Perhaps it's coming to terms with something beyond your control. Well, and perhaps it's a bad poem
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I'm not attacking you, just giving you a perspective.