Things on a Table

[Tim J Brennan]

mfwilkie wrote: ↑
Tue Feb 20, 2018 9:40 am
true, tim, but you still need to hear/see an error before revising it, don"t you think?
and you already know I speak to your muse's ear, and not to you.

Reading your explanations for word choices is a bit puzzling to me, because a young perspective could also display those items, be appreciative
of Em's effort at life and writing.

Things on a Table

a red Life Saver, glasses,
a dog-eared Dickinson—
all aslant, and true.

You rewrote my entire ending, Maggie, and changed the intention of the poem. I have no time for your "explanations" and would prefer you not lecture me about any appreciation I may have toward Emily.

If you want to continue to point out errors to me, please do so in a tactful and respectful manner as it pertains to my words.  Quite frankly, your suggested ending sucked. 

Tim, whatever intentions you have when writing poems are yours alone. Those intentions are not mine when I read the poem. And they are certainly not mine when I value the success of technique.Your explanation and expectations for adding the antique key didn't work for the poem. It doesn't set-up an age-related aura around the poem that influences your reader; the key is just one item among others on a table. 

And re-read my remarks about your explanations; they were specific to your reasoning behind word choices.

And I didn't rewrite your ending, I wrote an alternative ending for you to listen to. And you know that.

And this little ditty below, Em would love the play on her words in the last line.

Things on a Table

a red Life Saver, glasses,
a dog-eared Dickinson—
all aslant, and true.


So, because my time is pretty valuable, here's what I'm going to do for you in the future, 

Best news I've heard all week, Maggie.  And it's been a great week.  

There's a difference between expressing opinion and being rude. You've got half of this well covered.  Thanks.

Your ego has wrecked another of my threads. And this is the 3rd site you have insisted on doing so.  

[mfwilkie]

Not rude at all, Tim; I just don't a need to feed an ego that thinks it knows everything about writing poetry any longer.

And because words have meaning, Tim, I've made a copy of every edit and suggestion I have made on poems, and their ensuing conversations, over the years, including all of yours.

Your attempt at deflection was recognizable, and clearly self-serving. And also, sadly, predictable. 

Here's one last bit of wisdom to chew on, why your fragments never worked as fragments for me...

https://www.poets.org/poetsorg/text/fra ... s-glossary

Have a good life, Tim.


 

[Tim J Brennan]

Not rude at all, Tim; I just don't a need to feed an ego that thinks it knows everything about writing poetry any longer.

And because words have meaning, Tim, I've made a copy of every edit and suggestion I have made on poems, and their ensuing conversations, over the years, including all of yours.

Your attempt at deflection was recognizable, and clearly self-serving. And also, sadly, predictable. 

Here's one last bit of wisdom to chew on, why your fragments never worked as fragments for me...

https://www.poets.org/poetsorg/text/fra ... s-glossary

Have a good life, Tim.
 

My life is already good, Maggie.  I don't need your approval. 
 
Ever notice that when you say you're done talking but then you sneak in for one last snark?  This 'after' you say you're done feeding an ego?

And do you ever give your own opinion about things or do you always quote poet.org?   

Good luck w/the new site you started. I'm sure folks there will appreciate all you do for them.