the clothes she wore

Dave · Post by **Dave** » Fri May 15, 2020 9:33 am

the clothes she wore
were not semaphore
nor invitation

his intentions
were neither response
nor acceptance

the result
not love
or sexy

bruises fade
the pain remains

Post by **indar** » Fri May 15, 2020 10:42 am

So much for blaming the victim if it isn't seductive clothing, right? But wait! Why was she walking all alone:
in that neighborhood,
at that time of night,
through the campus after what happened last week?

This brief write lays it out in stark terms. It addresses an age-old condition that needs to be exposed over and over. Thanks Dave.

ajduclos · Post by **ajduclos** » Fri May 15, 2020 1:25 pm

Slamming and stark - right on the mark Dave. Well written and no holds barred. Bravo !!!
Aj

Post by **Colm Roe** » Fri May 15, 2020 8:02 pm

So much said in so few words.
And the best use of 'semaphore' I've seen...ever!

Dave · Post by **Dave** » Sun May 17, 2020 5:33 am

Thanks for all the generous replies and comments.
Dave

Post by **Colm Roe** » Sat May 23, 2020 8:57 pm

Hi murmac,
This tread is for poets who are looking for serious critiques. I read Dave's comment on your poem, and consider it to be honest and respectful. It might not have been what you'd have liked to read; but that's what we do here. I have differences of opinions with Dave, some, on reflection, I agree with...others I don't. But we're here to learn, and listen to what our readers think about our poems. Please accept Dave's comments (good or bad) with courtesy. Critiques (good or bad) take time, they should be considered or ignored, but always respected.
Comments like 'please stop your negative poetry' is unacceptable on this site.
Please PM me if you'd like to discuss any of the above.

murmac · Post by **murmac** » Sat May 23, 2020 9:52 pm

Dave · Post by **Dave** » Sun May 24, 2020 3:32 am

Hey all
Well I seem to have missed a shitstorm yesterday. What a pity. I have no objections to a bit of passion. Just so it is clear, I have written a PM (friendly and positive I hope) to Murmac. I won't go into it here but the gist is: I am happy he is writing on this site; I appreciate the fact that his poetry is different; I think there are things he could do better; he is free to ignore the comments but I think it helps us all if we try out what people suggest and lastly, I will try and frame my ideas as more direct suggests rather than as critique. Thanks to Colm and Indar for support of us both and more importantly poetry and this site.

Have a great Sunday. Life is short and precious

Post by **Colm Roe** » Sun May 24, 2020 7:26 pm

Thanks for your reply Dave, for contacting murmac, and for murmac's subsequent understanding

Not sure if that sentence was grammatically correct

Anywho, back to work guys...more poems please

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