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indar
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Sunday Morning Grace

Post by indar » Sat May 09, 2020 10:10 am

Pretty soon I'll have half the board taken up with my pomes. I'm continuing to write one every day although I took two and half on this one. Forgive me if I'm overdoing it ;)
 

Sunday Morning Grace
 
I won't say it was a glimmer in the air,
a flaw in rays from a lifting sun sifting through cattails
filled with calls of red-winged blackbirds;
 
words surely were not whispered by fluttering
cottonwoods up and down the shoreline 
advising me to regard the light,
causing me, a sneering cynic, to stand transfixed
as if something more than chance brought me there;
 
or, heading home, to a church's open doors on Franklin Avenue,
its every stone, worked two centuries ago, neatly fit
each to the other and I, conspicuous outsider who fit nowhere,
to sidle up the narrow steps to the balcony;
 
nor am I saying it was Phillip Brunelle at the pipe organ
its thunder blasting through heavy, hewn rafters;
nor dazzling rows of stained glass;
nor the gathering of community I once distained 
that shook me loose from the bone, blood,
the clotted thought of my empirical body;
 
I'm saying on that morning I came to know that shafts of sun, 
communities of faith and of blackbirds, cattails in still water,
ancient stones, standing pipes vibrating air 
into the miracle of music, glittering cottonwoods 
on the shore of Cedar Lake all had their place, 
fitted neatly, each to the other, beyond chance.
 


 

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Colm Roe
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Re: Sunday Morning Grace

Post by Colm Roe » Sat May 09, 2020 7:41 pm

Wonderful poem Linda.
The final S is wraps it up too perfectly.
Lovely sentiment; that it's not all chance...I have my doubts though.
More often than not I wonder about our intellect, regardless of how advanced we believe ourselves to be.
We've built our beliefs on the beliefs of cavemen, and just embellished and adapted them...but they must have been right :lol:
I have a feeling we're going to be more than surprised when we die...if there is 'something else' after.
Life is always stranger than fiction, the physics of our world far more so...the bits we can understand are still so minute it's laughable. The Unified Field Theory arrogant scientists reckoned was 'almost there' in the 80's is further away now. The mind of God was within reach :lol: The more discoveries they make the more confused they become.
Rant over. Something, probably some unidentified/undiscovered something created the wonderful happenstance or serendipity in your poem...or maybe it was just serendipity :D
Anywho, I LOVE this rather beautiful poem,

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Re: Sunday Morning Grace

Post by Colm Roe » Sat May 09, 2020 7:59 pm

indar wrote:
Sat May 09, 2020 10:10 am
Pretty soon I'll have half the board taken up with my pomes. I'm continuing to write one every day although I took two and half on this one. Forgive me if I'm overdoing it


Not sure what pomes are :lol:
But if they're as good as this I've no objection to you saturating board :D

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Re: Sunday Morning Grace

Post by indar » Sun May 10, 2020 9:09 am

Thanks Colm, I subscribe to the "infinite possibilities" idea. This write probably deals more with a very subjective reality in which synchronicity plays a role. Don't know if the two things are related--we are pea brains trying to figure out ultimate mystery. :D :D  

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Re: Sunday Morning Grace

Post by Wren Tuatha » Sun May 10, 2020 11:11 am

I particularly enjoyed the images here--cattails, blackbirds, worked stones. Thanks! I suspect your narrator slots in just fine...

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Re: Sunday Morning Grace

Post by indar » Tue May 12, 2020 1:39 pm

She does, thank you Wren.

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Post by murmac » Tue May 12, 2020 7:09 pm

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Re: Sunday Morning Grace

Post by indar » Wed May 13, 2020 4:22 pm

ImageThe Church of which I write

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