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Losing

Posted: Mon Apr 29, 2019 8:46 pm
by lisaeagle65
LOSING

The sculptress comes in the night
works in white and lays herself
over sagebrush, trees and rocks.

I learn again that she is master
of design and beauty.
I look back at my tracks
see the blemish left
in the softness.

 stop at a baby tree
and study the branches
each with an equal amount
of trickled snow.
My finger flicks a tiny limb
into a bare imbalance.

I stand for a moment
feel the warming sun on my hair,
listen to a bird I cannot see
wonder what he is saying.
Crying perhaps for a kingdom
pushed towards extinction.
Warning that our instincts are dying,
that our culture will disappear
like the snow 
 I just flicked away.

He is a meadowlark
his song has not changed
in my fifty four short years.
I know he'll not trade wisdom
for an easier way.

I walk on
leaving Nike tracks...

Re: Losing

Posted: Tue Apr 30, 2019 2:44 pm
by Gyppo
The snow as sculptress (active) rather than the cliched blanket (deadening.)

Quietly evocative, painting a clear picture with words.

Modern Nike footprints in timeless but transient snow.  A lovely juxtaposition.  The words will linger long after both have gone.

Gyppo

Re: Losing

Posted: Wed May 01, 2019 9:20 am
by DocCon
A resonant and beautiful piece... A nice juxtaposition of the Nike sneakers with the deep adaption theme, the disapearance of our civilization with the 'lost kingdom' of the birds -- gorgeous.

Re: Losing

Posted: Fri May 03, 2019 9:49 am
by Tracy Mitchell
Gorgeous writing, Lisa.  I wish I had seen this sooner.  I will be back to it over and over, I think.

T

Re: Losing

Posted: Sun May 05, 2019 10:31 pm
by lisaeagle65
Thank you Gyppo and DonCon for your kind comments.

Tracy, we miss you at the tower!!!

Re: Losing

Posted: Mon May 06, 2019 6:12 am
by ajduclos
My lord, Lisa.  Such quietly powerful words, speaks volumes, so wonderfully painted.  Beautiful and evocative.  Like Tracy, I will be back to read and wonder over this writing. 
Aj 
 

Re: Losing

Posted: Thu Aug 01, 2019 8:43 pm
by Deb
Beautiful Poem, Lisa. I love the thought of snow as a sculptress. She is, indeed. As are you with this poem.



~Deb