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HLemma
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Day 4: Tokens

Post by HLemma » Thu Apr 04, 2019 10:00 am

Everywhere.

Paint by number cats
and unnamed hamlets.

A Christie thriller
halved with recipes.

The tv room
without her soaps,

the kitchen
where she doesn’t sing.

Empty beds
where marigolds had grown,

goldenrod
that flares up anyway.

The family
that makes an effort now.

A vessel
for her ruins -

saliva fingertips
that once erased the smudges from my cheeks,

hands
that swept my errant strands of hair

from left to right.

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Re: Day 4: Tokens

Post by Janet 77 » Thu Apr 04, 2019 1:07 pm

This is heartbreakingly beautiful. You've used so few words to say so much.

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Re: Day 4: Tokens

Post by HLemma » Thu Apr 04, 2019 5:07 pm

Janet_R wrote:
Thu Apr 04, 2019 1:07 pm
This is heartbreakingly beautiful. You've used so few words to say so much.

Thanks Janet.

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Post by Tracy Mitchell » Thu Apr 04, 2019 5:30 pm

High art, Hugh. :)

Keep them coming, but I do need to hustle to absorb all of these gems.

Cheers.

T

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Post by Gyppo » Thu Apr 04, 2019 8:02 pm

Made my eyes prickle, and that doesn't happen all that often.

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Post by HLemma » Sat Apr 06, 2019 12:09 pm

Tracy and Gyppo, thanks for your responses.

I lost my mother on January 3. This was written for her birthday.

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Post by Tracy Mitchell » Sat Apr 06, 2019 1:31 pm

It really packs a wallop, Hugh. Again, very good writing. :)

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Re: Day 4: Tokens

Post by lisaeagle65 » Sun Apr 07, 2019 7:08 pm

painfully beautiful because it's so honest.

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