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#2

Posted: Mon Apr 01, 2019 6:51 pm
by Colm Roe
30 ways to die. 
#2

It comes in bitter silence, 
pertinent sentences 
that roll unspoken 
inside his skull,
with no means of escape.

He staples them to each other, 
as the paper
becomes parchment

inside he tells her everything.

Running out of time and room
words expand to their own pressure,
press themselves into life, tangible 
but trapped, 
they know their destiny.

Outside she waits
knows what's inside him
senses the clicks and swells, yet
sours, more frustrated
boring imaginary holes 
in his stubborn head, while hers 
will remain 
forever intact.

 

Re: #2

Posted: Mon Apr 01, 2019 7:02 pm
by Sharon Leigh
I love this one, Colm, its tone perfect for the subject, the sonics and syllables lending themselves well to the clipped, frustrated voice. The death of truth.

30 ways indeed! Bring them on :)

Re: #2

Posted: Tue Apr 02, 2019 4:13 am
by ajduclos
I totally agree with Sharon - Colm, this is a gem !!!

Re: #2

Posted: Tue Apr 02, 2019 7:13 am
by Tracy Mitchell
:D :D

Re: #2

Posted: Tue Apr 02, 2019 11:09 am
by indar
the thread is in kind of a snarl so I'll comment here on both your entries so far--fabulous!

Re: #2

Posted: Tue Apr 02, 2019 1:32 pm
by DocCon
Indeed, agree with everyone -- a really great piece, with a tone both mysterious and realistic, almost a magic realism.

Thanks!

Doc

Re: #2

Posted: Wed Apr 03, 2019 7:05 pm
by Colm Roe
:)