About the Woman Begging in ChinaTown

[Tim J Brennan]

Can you keep a secret?
Have you ever felt as lonely

as I did the last time
I saw her?

[Colm Roe]

It leaves it open for us to fill in the gaps.
A neat poem Tim.

[Tom]

Crisp, incisive, concise.

[Tim J Brennan]

It leaves it open for us to fill in the gaps.
A neat poem Tim.

Thanks, Colm. Many gaps. She was kneeling. Two hours later, she was still kneeling.

[Tim J Brennan]

Crisp, incisive, concise.

Thanks, Tom. Many C's.

[Dave]

I dont seem very good at making you understand my comments but like a lot of your poems i find this has an ambivilent tension. In the case between the title and the content: the former promises a poem about a Chinese women begging and what arrives a poem about the lonliness of the N. A lot happens in few words.

[Tim J Brennan]

I dont seem very good at making you understand my comments but like a lot of your poems i find this has an ambivilent tension. In the case between the title and the content: the former promises a poem about a Chinese women begging and what arrives a poem about the lonliness of the N. A lot happens in few words.

I have no control over your expectations to my poems, Dave. I rarely make promises in my life b/c someone always seems to get disappointed. This poem promised nothing except a reader's interpretation. You seem to have one so I'm happy. My goal was to do it in as few words as possible.

[Tim J Brennan]

I dont seem very good at making you understand my comments but like a lot of your poems i find this has an ambivilent tension. In the case between the title and the content: the former promises a poem about a Chinese women begging and what arrives a poem about the lonliness of the N. A lot happens in few words.

I have no control over your expectations to my poems, Dave. I rarely make promises in my life b/c someone always seems to get disappointed. This poem promised nothing except a reader's interpretation. You seem to have one so I'm happy. My goal was to do it in as few words as possible.

For myself, I was wondering how the two question format was working.

[indar]

Four lines.
Many more than 4 layers of meaning.

I am not usually a fan of minimalism but I don't regard this one as minimalist.

[Dave]

Tim i had no expectations and therefore none were disappointed. I merely commented my perception. It was not a comment on the quality purely what i read. The poem is short and for that gets a lot in.