Hurricane

[midnightcandle]

Beautiful. No nits from me. Love 'the new eleven' line. You are a wonderful poet, Sharon

[Sharon Leigh]

Thanks so much, Daryl

[Tim J Brennan]

"If I could

I'd manipulate the early
April weather: seed cirrus,
nimbus pregnant, full
with dust and promise"

Beautiful, full poem.  I'd look here and see if "manipulate" and "seed cirrus" isn't a shade of redundancy.  When one seeds clouds (for rain) it IS manipulation.  

Tim

[Sharon Leigh]

Thanks much, Tim, I hadn't thought of that so I'll consider there. Appreciate your looking in!

Best,
S

[Mark]

"
Beautiful, full poem. I'd look here and see if "manipulate" and "seed cirrus" isn't a shade of redundancy. When one seeds clouds (for rain) it IS manipulation.

Tim

Reasonable point - but seeding clouds isn't necessarily the only method of manipulating weather - poetically it could be rain dances or technocratically it could be ELF microwave transmissions a la HAARP. I don't think the shades of that nuance is worth adjusting the composition over.

[Tim J Brennan]

Well, I guess it would depend on the author's meaning of "seed"....only she would know intention.  Thought it worth mentioning....

[Colm Roe]

Fab poem Sharon, so much to appreciate here...I love the '11 between the brows' line.

[Sharon Leigh]

Colm, thanks a bunch, & thanks for looking in!

Best,
Sharon