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Kate
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Bugged

Post by Kate » Sat Jan 13, 2018 1:18 pm

Bugged

Pinned, backside down,
against foam core
white as a lab coat,
limbs flailing in air,
antennae groping
for direction.
Missing a vital organ,
the pin holds securely
while the thrashing
will last till starvation.

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Tracy Mitchell
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Re: Bugged

Post by Tracy Mitchell » Sat Jan 13, 2018 4:47 pm

Nice poem - grim finale.
An allegory for MWC, is it? Just asking.

T

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Sharon Leigh
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Re: Bugged

Post by Sharon Leigh » Sat Jan 13, 2018 5:11 pm

Yikes- v effective, the desperation. Sad! Do...insects even have vital organs? Probably :D

Well written!

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Sharon

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Re: Bugged

Post by Matty11 » Sat Jan 13, 2018 9:35 pm

Hi Kate,

I take Tracy's point about an allegory. Like Sharon I wonder about insects/organs (the insect on its back triggered a thought of Kafka's Metamorphosis). The dynamic of flailing/groping/thrashing are pinned brilliantly with the finality of starvation.

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Phil

I just googled insects/organs - and yes they do - learning is part of this poetry lark :)

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Kate
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Re: Bugged

Post by Kate » Sun Jan 14, 2018 6:37 am

Thanks All. This, obviously, was a quick ditty to help populate the board.

Signed, Bug

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Re: Bugged

Post by Catherine » Sun Jan 14, 2018 9:29 am

Crual world ! And cold blooded statement. It does read like a metaphor...

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Re: Bugged

Post by Catherine » Sun Jan 14, 2018 9:32 am

And I add I like the use of future at the end (will last...)It reinforces the cruelty touch : you will suffer long, and then only will you die.

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Re: Bugged

Post by Marc Gilbert » Sun Jan 14, 2018 4:23 pm

Extremely vivid, Kate. Like it a lot. So glad you're here!
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Re: Bugged

Post by indar » Sun Jan 14, 2018 4:27 pm

Is it OK to cry over a poem about a bug? The only saving thought is that they don't have much of a frontal lobe.
Good tell--the mention of the foam core as white as a lab coat. The dry eye of scientific observation. There are so many ways life on this planet (including human) becomes the subject of statistics, polls, consumer research etc etc. pinned down indeed.

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Re: Bugged

Post by Dansinger » Mon Jan 15, 2018 1:41 pm

Oh dear! My father in law used to do this. He did butterflies and ichneumon wasps. I didn't share in his passion.

The poem describes it quite vividly. Made me shiver. Well done.

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