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Silence

Posted: Thu Nov 16, 2023 6:49 pm
by Colm Roe
Silence #1

Autumn's palette 
initiates a signal to fall

I sit behind glass
and will them to cling
to resist the breeze's instructions
to grip hard
and then harder 
when sodden and heavy 
even the rain scolds
their obdurate stance

they could stay
I know they could
but one by one
they drop silent
 
shouldn't their detachment make a sound
a cruel little snap
register a tiny yelp of pain

behind the glass that separates us
I sometimes wonder who's the specimen

and them 
all peace and quiet 
just following their paths
looking in
wondering about the strange reluctance
of all the artifacts
observing them.

Re: Silence

Posted: Fri Nov 17, 2023 7:55 am
by skylightgreg
Love the play with point of view here.

Really enjoyable read.

Re: Silence

Posted: Sun Nov 19, 2023 7:07 pm
by Colm Roe
Thanks, Greg  :)

Re: Silence

Posted: Tue Nov 21, 2023 10:50 am
by Dave
Hey Colm
Atypical Colm piece in the best sense, playful, meaningful and with an easy way with words and pictures. Nicely done

Re: Silence

Posted: Tue Nov 21, 2023 6:54 pm
by Colm Roe
Thanks, Dave. 
Much appreciated  :)

Re: Silence

Posted: Thu Nov 23, 2023 1:12 am
by Matty11
Very much enjoyed Colm. Perspectives, inside/outside, invite the reader to reflect on insistence/acceptance/resistance. A rewarding and resonant read.

Phil

Re: Silence

Posted: Thu Nov 23, 2023 1:46 am
by Gyppo
'they could stay
I know they could
but one by one
they drop silent
 
shouldn't their detachment make a sound
a cruel little snap
register a tiny yelp of pain'



Maybe they do, Colm, but we are lucky enough not to hear it.  Autumn would be agony if we could hear such sounds.

Lovely poem.

Gyppo

Re: Silence

Posted: Thu Nov 23, 2023 5:36 pm
by Colm Roe
Many thanks, Phil and Gyppo  :)  I'm glad this one seems to work  :)

Re: Silence

Posted: Sat Dec 09, 2023 8:02 am
by Gyppo
I'm sure that admin will, in the fullness of time, delete these spurious ads from Colm's thread.  But, having seen a new name , I was bitterly disappointed to find they were a Spammer

Francis Crype would be a glorious name for a poet.

Gyppo

Re: Silence

Posted: Sat Dec 09, 2023 10:25 am
by Mark
I deleted the spam and banned the spammer - pity, I agree Francis Crype is a great name for a poet in a  R.L. Stevenson sort of way.