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Seemed like a good idea at the time. 

As If

something
is caught
in your hand
yet
nothing is there

the clasp
still cradles
the nothingness
of
everything

~Deb

? The title makes this poem a galivanting quandary.  That feeling arises-- of being an imposter -- from your 18 word poem, but there is so much more, hard to put into words, but certainly an existential assertion.  The poem pulls no punches.

Bravo.

T

Hm. Of course, I appreciate the brevity that also manages to provoke reflection. It seems to have dual titles? I think 'your clasp' would read better than 'the clasp' - assuming this is your meaning - in S1 that POV is employed with 'your hand' - in the interests of continuity and flow.   

Interesting write Deb, as usual. I actually like "the clasp" in stanza 2 as it suggests being beyond one's power to relinquish it.

I love the expansiveness of the second stanza.  The words shift into a brand new palm--the hand of the universe.