Knob-Handled Pot

[AlienFlower]

 

This perforated two-handled pot 

firmly seated up next to the fan 

grows a vine. It glints waxy green

on hot days. Tentacles 

weave spills

like locks from Rapunzel 

all-the-way-down-to-the-sill

which I trim, so more will wind

through the clay holes 

and off the cracked rim. 

Knob-handled pots should be sus-

pending so smoke wends abroad 

in all directions fending off wicked intentions, 

too multifaced to submit 

to my tending.

[Mark]

A wandering narrative that wends its way to a gentle conclusion. Multi-faced? Or faceted?

[Gyppo]

Pleasingly visual, Jackie.

Gyppo

[Dave]

Hey 
A different subject. I found some imaging could do with more precision and some was interesting. Firstly, that pot was seated is an odd word choice.  I am not surre the mixed metaphor/simile of tentacles and Rapunzel's hair work well here. Tentacles do not have the same texture or form of locks. I can imagine one or the other but not both. See no sense in the hyphens added to all the way down to the sill, which turn this into a noun. At the moment in any case you seem to be trimming the sill not the hair. Lastly, not convinced of the line break on sus--

Hope this helps

Dave
 

[AlienFlower]

Thank you Mark, Gyppo and Dave—always appreciate your comments.