House Call

[Mark]

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I’m a newbie
smoking doobie
and I wanna post
a poem on the coast

Um, no, it’s about the coast
Okay. Wait… okay. All right! Gimme a match!
So the beach… (koff)... I mean the coast…
has beaches, mostly. And these beaches
have like girls on them, in bikinis. Right?
And I used to have one - I mean, a girl, not a bikini.
Help me, dude, I dunno how to say this in a poem way.
 
Our love was star glitter dust sprinkled on rainbow waves
of moonlight sighing over luminous pearls and iridescent coral.

Thanks, man. That’s ‘zackly how it was. But then the bitch dumped me. For another girl. Okay, so she was super-hot, the other girl, but still, man, that sucks.
So take my advice, be careful who you bring home for a three-way, that’s all I’m saying, man. And don't fall asleep before they do, bro.... Ah shit dude!! I talked it into ash and that was the last of my stash... I frigging hate you, Markus.    


 

[Tracy Mitchell]

Don't fall asleep before they do.  Ha! -great advice

A real creative write.  The Narrator is an interesting  character, and the story is hilarious.

BTW - when was the last time we both have been on the site at the same time.

Check PM

T

[Dansinger]

That gave me a chuckle, Mark. 

[Mark]

Thanks for looking, guys.

[Gyppo]

You can add me to the list of those who smiled.

Last to sleep and first to wake is always the safe bet

Gyppo

[Mark]

Thanks, Gyppo. Insomnia as a plus...

[Dave]

A fun poem with good advice. A good way to start a new year.