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Oswyn, formerly of the Forestry Commission
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Oswyn, formerly of the Forestry Commission
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A little sun to warm the bench
and I'm set for the morning,
eyes fixed to west
tracing and retracing
the treeline above Cwmcroidder
as though securing a robe of sunlight
to the mountain’s shoulder.
Thirty years ago I planted the larches,
since perished, felled. Only natives now —
*aethnenni, helyg, derw digoes —
They will not slide, on this watch,
once more into the shade.
*Aspen, willow, sessile oak.
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A little sun to warm his bench
and he’s set for the morning,
eyes fixed to west
tracing and retracing
the treeline above Cwmcroidder
as though securing a robe of sunlight
to the mountain’s shoulder.
Thirty years ago he planted the larches,
since perished, felled. Only natives now,
he boasts —
*aethnenni, helyg, derw digoes —
They will not slide, on his watch,
once more into the shade.
*Aspen, willow, sessile oak.
A little sun to warm the bench
and I'm set for the morning,
eyes fixed to west
tracing and retracing
the treeline above Cwmcroidder
as though securing a robe of sunlight
to the mountain’s shoulder.
Thirty years ago I planted the larches,
since perished, felled. Only natives now —
*aethnenni, helyg, derw digoes —
They will not slide, on this watch,
once more into the shade.
*Aspen, willow, sessile oak.
Original
A little sun to warm his bench
and he’s set for the morning,
eyes fixed to west
tracing and retracing
the treeline above Cwmcroidder
as though securing a robe of sunlight
to the mountain’s shoulder.
Thirty years ago he planted the larches,
since perished, felled. Only natives now,
he boasts —
*aethnenni, helyg, derw digoes —
They will not slide, on his watch,
once more into the shade.
*Aspen, willow, sessile oak.
Last edited by Interlace1 on Sat Jul 10, 2021 10:47 am, edited 1 time in total.
Re: Oswyn, formerly of the Forestry Commission
Nice one Luke. Like the sense of connection and guardianship. My googling brought me to Cwmcroiddur for spelling:
https://cilycwm.com/?page_id=3786
Natural Resources Wales have been felling Larch around here - Cwmcarn and Sirhowy - I was particularly annoyed when - probably contractors - felled some Scots Pine (a fav of woodland birds).
Loved the robe of sunlight on the shoulder.
cheers
Phil
https://cilycwm.com/?page_id=3786
Natural Resources Wales have been felling Larch around here - Cwmcarn and Sirhowy - I was particularly annoyed when - probably contractors - felled some Scots Pine (a fav of woodland birds).
Loved the robe of sunlight on the shoulder.
cheers
Phil
Re: Oswyn, formerly of the Forestry Commission
Really enjoyed this. Very succinctly and carefully composed.
Dave
Dave
Re: Oswyn, formerly of the Forestry Commission
I have had trees and forests on my mind since visiting the giant California sequoias this past week. I expected to come home inspired, uplifted by their beauty. But I was not prepared for the huge parking lots and regulated walkways to go see certain trees that are in many cases the lone survivors of early logging practices. I spend too much time being sad about such things of late. I believe its a world-wide sadness. Thank you for posting this.
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Re: Oswyn, formerly of the Forestry Commission
Thanks all - much appreciated. Phil, you're right about the spelling error, to my shame. Ta.
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Re: Oswyn, formerly of the Forestry Commission
I like this a lot. Have you played with first-person? It might make the feel more intimate. Not sure if that would be what you want. In any event, a nice poem
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Re: Oswyn, formerly of the Forestry Commission
...securing a robe of sunlight
to the mountain’s shoulder.
to the mountain’s shoulder.
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Re: Oswyn, formerly of the Forestry Commission
Tracy, thank you. I hadn't considered it but I have now.. What do you think? I'm keen.
Luke
Luke
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Re: Oswyn, formerly of the Forestry Commission
P. S - for version 2 I could drop 'Oswyn' from the title...
Luke
Luke
Re: Oswyn, formerly of the Forestry Commission
For first person, probably best Luke.