General Poetry - post, comment, review, critique
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Dave
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by Dave » Sat May 08, 2021 7:07 am
Godd revision Phil
Dave
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Colm Roe
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by Colm Roe » Sat May 08, 2021 8:02 pm
Matty11 wrote: ↑Sat May 08, 2021 2:12 am
There is a relationship aspect in the poem.
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The original title created a lot of ambiguity. 'Shared' is definitely better.
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Matty11
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by Matty11 » Sat May 08, 2021 11:17 pm
Thanks Dave and Colm for revisiting. The poem has certainly benefitted from the feedback.
cheers
Phil
