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Matty11
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Wave

Post by Matty11 » Wed Oct 07, 2020 9:42 pm

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Tracy Mitchell
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Re: Wave

Post by Tracy Mitchell » Thu Oct 08, 2020 11:50 am

Metaphysics wrapped in a T-shirt.

Creative and engaging.
I haven't seen a shape poem quite like this-- It comes at the reader in waves.

Here is how I am [tentatively] lineating it:

No wave – no life washes up / but the Tshirt / does not fit the metaphysics [/] shrink

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Colm Roe
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Re: Wave

Post by Colm Roe » Thu Oct 08, 2020 6:34 pm

Philosopher Phil :)
Not fond of shaped poems; but it made me think.
The typo in 'life' tripped me...or was that a metaphysical ploy ;)
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Re: Wave

Post by Matty11 » Thu Oct 08, 2020 8:28 pm

No wave no life washes up / but the Tshirt does not fit /the metaphysics shrink
That was the intention, but the reading is open T.

Corrected the typo Colm.

Thanks both. I suspect the fun of this is in the doing rather than reading :)

cheers

Phil
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