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Colm Roe
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Cling

Post by Colm Roe » Fri Sep 11, 2020 7:44 pm

I'm going to run away
pack a few belongings
like I did many times as a child
take essential items to sustain me
condensed things like
stock cubes and jelly
compact salty and sweet treats
to nibble - I won't need much this time
this time they'll be vegetarian
I know I might return but
hope to last longer
go further
not to be found hiding
in a hedge
in my garden
and on this return
not gorge
and cling again
to the same fucking branches.

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Re: Cling

Post by Dave » Sat Sep 12, 2020 8:40 am

Hey Colm
I enjoyed this and could relate to it. It is written with a light touch and a certain everyday colloquial style that suits the subject. There is one thing I don't really get, which is the last line, in particular, the branches.
Dave

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Re: Cling

Post by Colm Roe » Sun Sep 13, 2020 6:47 pm

Hi Dave,
I suppose they're his origin, his safe place.
Thanks for commenting.

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Re: Cling

Post by Matty11 » Thu Sep 17, 2020 12:21 pm

Felt you were playing with evolution in there Colm, as well as family, but in this narrative there is regression.

not to be found hiding - like that, difficult to cling to dignity when exposed and fear kicks in

enjoyed

Phil

 

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Re: Cling

Post by Colm Roe » Fri Sep 18, 2020 6:25 pm

Cheers Phil :)

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