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Tim J Brennan

Old poet, Old poetry

Post by Tim J Brennan » Thu Mar 19, 2020 10:23 am

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indar
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Re: Old poet, Old poetry

Post by indar » Thu Mar 19, 2020 10:32 am

WOW

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Tracy Mitchell
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Re: Old poet, Old poetry

Post by Tracy Mitchell » Thu Mar 19, 2020 8:42 pm

Really wonderful, Tim.
Bravo!

T

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Re: Old poet, Old poetry

Post by Dave » Fri Mar 20, 2020 3:37 pm

Indeed though well written the first two stanzas are old poetry and an idea as old as... well old and from my point of view not very engaging - which is clearly me not the fault of the poem.
The second two stanzas are wonderful and IMO could easier and maybe even to better effect stand alone. The use if the word 'hisses' is sensational.

Dave

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Re: Old poet, Old poetry

Post by Tim J Brennan » Sun Mar 22, 2020 8:19 am

indar wrote:
Thu Mar 19, 2020 10:32 am
WOW

Thank you, indar

Tim J Brennan

Re: Old poet, Old poetry

Post by Tim J Brennan » Sun Mar 22, 2020 8:20 am

Tracy Mitchell wrote:
Thu Mar 19, 2020 8:42 pm
Really wonderful, Tim.
Bravo!

T

Thanks, Tracy. Keep hiking.

Tim J Brennan

Re: Old poet, Old poetry

Post by Tim J Brennan » Sun Mar 22, 2020 8:20 am

Dave wrote:
Fri Mar 20, 2020 3:37 pm
Indeed though well written the first two stanzas are old poetry and an idea as old as... well old and from my point of view not very engaging - which is clearly me not the fault of the poem.
The second two stanzas are wonderful and IMO could easier and maybe even to better effect stand alone. The use if the word 'hisses' is sensational.

Dave

Loveme a good hisses. Thanks, Dave.

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