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Old poet, Old poetry
Old poet, Old poetry
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Last edited by Tim J Brennan on Fri Jan 29, 2021 12:51 pm, edited 1 time in total.
- Tracy Mitchell
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Re: Old poet, Old poetry
Really wonderful, Tim.
Bravo!
T
Bravo!
T
Re: Old poet, Old poetry
Indeed though well written the first two stanzas are old poetry and an idea as old as... well old and from my point of view not very engaging - which is clearly me not the fault of the poem.
The second two stanzas are wonderful and IMO could easier and maybe even to better effect stand alone. The use if the word 'hisses' is sensational.
Dave
The second two stanzas are wonderful and IMO could easier and maybe even to better effect stand alone. The use if the word 'hisses' is sensational.
Dave
Re: Old poet, Old poetry
Thanks, Tracy. Keep hiking.
Re: Old poet, Old poetry
Dave wrote: ↑Fri Mar 20, 2020 3:37 pmIndeed though well written the first two stanzas are old poetry and an idea as old as... well old and from my point of view not very engaging - which is clearly me not the fault of the poem.
The second two stanzas are wonderful and IMO could easier and maybe even to better effect stand alone. The use if the word 'hisses' is sensational.
Dave
Loveme a good hisses. Thanks, Dave.