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A cloche of cliche

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Mark
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A cloche of cliche

Post by Mark » Thu Jan 23, 2020 3:04 pm

There are many gardens in this world,
some beautiful and some unkempt.
A lovely garden is a labour of love -
an appreciation of nature’s gifts;
the soil as foundation, the sun
as the engine of creation, rain
is the blessing from above.
Seeds obey the seasons
as kernels of germination,
flowers are the determination
of intent; branches and leaves
lend shade in the heat of day
and the birds and insects
give meaning to their play,
darting and weaving
in a dazzling but quiet display
of nature in harmony.
You and I are building a new garden
together. It’s a landscape
of possibilities and probabilities,
pathways and corners, a bench to
contemplate clouds in the sky,
to quietly wonder at the stream
of miracles silently passing by,
walking barefoot on cool grass
fresh as the morning dewfall.
There will be weeds to be uprooted
there will be hungry insects, blight
and storms, the dust of drought
and the frosts of winter’s doubt.
And in the spring, each year
upon year, the strengthening
of roots, new shoots to delight
the eye, the floating fragrance
of blossoms sent from heaven.
We are the architects of our destiny,
the gardens that couples build together
are expressions and manifestations
of the efforts for tomorrow,
the patience of today,
and the wisdom of all yesterdays.
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Tracy Mitchell
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Re: A cloche of cliche

Post by Tracy Mitchell » Fri Feb 07, 2020 9:48 am

There is a lot of pleasant word-play in this, Mark.  The sounds are addictive.  
It took a bit, but I also found a decent rhythm to the poem as well.

I wonder if the title is a defensive pose against the prospect that much of the text could be said to contain well-trodden phraseology and metaphor.   For what it's worth, that was not my overall take.  If there is that concern, then a gentle pruning could effectively mitigate that effect.

Still, there is an overall strength of the wisdom and advisory of narrative.

I enjoyed.

Thanks for posting, Mark.

Cheers.

T
 

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