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Posted: **Tue Jan 14, 2020 12:53 pm**

Love this Phil.
Awesome opening line -- so graphic.
S.2 L.1 -- delete "the"? - just asking.

Cheers.

T

Posted: **Tue Jan 14, 2020 6:32 pm**

That's a neat little poem Phil

Posted: **Wed Jan 15, 2020 9:42 pm**

Wonderful, kept wanting there to be some allusion to the waters being "shallow" too

Posted: **Thu Jan 16, 2020 1:10 pm**

Usually avoid poems about poems but I enjoyed this very much, with its brief, biting images.

Posted: **Fri Jan 17, 2020 8:35 pm**

Thanks Trish, Sharon, Colm and T.

S.2 L.1 -- delete "the"?

Agreed T. Thanks for that.

cheers

phil

A poem that lost its voice