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Re: Neighbors
Posted: Tue Jan 14, 2020 9:28 pm
by Tim J Brennan
Sharon Leigh wrote: ↑Mon Jan 13, 2020 5:37 pm
An excellent study, its all there in its gritty glory. Always enjoy your pen, never over-written, but focused in the best way. I didn't see it pre-edit but as it stands now it's powerfully ended on the tactile slap of paper in calloused palm. Bravo
Glad you can visualize the calloused palm and the propensity for violence., Sharon. Like a word like "tactile" in seeing what's not said. Very encouraging to me as a writer.
Re: Neighbors
Posted: Thu Jan 16, 2020 11:55 am
by Dave
Hey Tim
By the way, strictly speaking this syntax is misleading since it implies that the door is haunted - He, skeletal, robed, moves to a door almost
haunted,...
Dave
Re: Neighbors
Posted: Thu Jan 16, 2020 1:16 pm
by Tim J Brennan
Dave wrote: ↑Thu Jan 16, 2020 11:55 am
Hey Tim
By the way, strictly speaking this syntax is misleading since it implies that the door is haunted -
He, skeletal, robed, moves to a door almosthaunted,...
Dave
Thanks, Dave. You're always helpful.