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Better Than This

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Trish Saunders
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Re: Better Than This

Post by Trish Saunders » Thu Jan 16, 2020 12:56 pm

I love this strange short poem, Tracy. I did not know Monte Hall had such a wish. (Shakespeare, not Lets Make a Deal? As if.) 

The poem's rueful tone is well done, understated. I'm not sure the final line is needed, though. I very much enjoyed the read.

 
 

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Tracy Mitchell
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Re: Better Than This

Post by Tracy Mitchell » Thu Jan 16, 2020 1:13 pm

Thanks Trish for the kind words. 

I chuckle because invariably Tom Riordon's comment to me was 'cut the last line'.   :)

Of course he was usually right, and I think you are right with this as well.

T

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