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We Sold His Grandma's House

Posted: Tue Dec 03, 2019 3:57 pm
by indar
Every stitch of clothes he owned
lay in piles around him,
one pair of shoes
walked down at the heels,
he always slipped his feet in
rather than untie them.

The room appeared
uninhabited
it took his cousin searching
to find his body
beneath his sleeping bag.

We'd been in and out
moving furniture,
cleaning cupboards
and never guessed his whereabouts.

Re: We Sold His Grandma's House

Posted: Tue Dec 03, 2019 3:59 pm
by indar
This is a grief-write. I am devastated. I'll be back to participate in a little while

Re: We Sold His Grandma's House

Posted: Tue Dec 03, 2019 4:23 pm
by ajduclos
I hear...  there are no words... I send you warmth.............

Aj

Re: We Sold His Grandma's House

Posted: Thu Dec 05, 2019 3:57 am
by Sharon Leigh
I am so sorry, for your loss - It's difficult to find words... all my condolences at this most trying time, indar 🌷

Re: We Sold His Grandma's House

Posted: Fri Dec 06, 2019 4:39 am
by Matty11
My condolences too at this time. Poetry does help.

Take care

Phil

Re: We Sold His Grandma's House

Posted: Fri Dec 06, 2019 7:07 pm
by Colm Roe
Sorry to hear that this is real Linda.
It's very well written, and with great restraint.
His story silently screams, barely hidden behind your careful words.
I get the feeling the almost matter of fact way it's written reflects a resignation...your 
family did all they could for him, and all that's left is this!
S1 in particular paints a painful picture, the shoes especially. Just one pair  :cry:  
'down on his heels' is a clever way of showing his situation. The way you knew
details, like the way he wore them and even how they were worn down tells us
volumes about way he wasn't a family outcast...he was always considered!   
My thoughts are with you Linda. 

Re: We Sold His Grandma's House

Posted: Sun Dec 08, 2019 11:58 am
by Dave
Hey Indar
A devastating experience. I am very sorry that you had to be confronted by such a sad tragedy. As Colm indicates the poem benefits from its simplicity and stark truth. A very powerful piece born of grief. My thoughts are with you.

Dave