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Gyppo
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Getting Horizontal

Post by Gyppo » Mon Nov 11, 2019 10:20 pm

Getting Horizontal

I've just spent an hour on my floor.
No, I didn't fall.
No my back doesn't hurt.

A sudden impulse to get horizontal, 
listening to old music 
without the distraction of videos.

I set up a play list,
then flopped out on the carpet.

Mama Cass and her cohort
took me to Creeque Alley,
and I shared Summer In The City
with John Sebastian's Spoonful.

The Moody Blues, somewhat dramatically,
asked me The Question.
then lounged around in White Satin.

Procul Harum slowly wound on,
about a Whiter Shade of Pale.

Leonard Cohen growled hypnotically
about some bird called Suzanne
who lived near a river

The Byrds were Eight Miles High,
and I still don't know what it meant..

No red or black candle,
flickering in the wax encrusted neck
of an old round-bodied wine bottle.

No twirly Hippy thing, hanging above, 
swirling in the convection currents..

Must have slowed my pulse way down,
forty per minute or less.
A leisurely wander down memory lane.

Bit of a bugger getting back up again though ;-)

Gyppo
I've been writing ever since I realised I could.  Storytelling since I started talking.  Poetry however comes and goes  ;-)

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Tracy Mitchell
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Re: Getting Horizontal

Post by Tracy Mitchell » Mon Nov 11, 2019 11:44 pm

It was like the love of thorns, like the beauty of dead summer
But I, the lurker, the carrier of wounds outlived it. . . .
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Great reminisce, Gyppo.  And a valuable exercise from time to time -- to remember he who we used to be.   

And then, unfortunately, the back and knees remind us of who we are now.  

Cheers.

T

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Re: Getting Horizontal

Post by Dave » Fri Nov 15, 2019 1:34 pm

Hey Gyppo
I really enjoyed this. My favourite of your recent poems.
Dave
 

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Colm Roe
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Re: Getting Horizontal

Post by Colm Roe » Thu Nov 21, 2019 2:00 am

Enjoyed the read Gyppo, and the 'trip' down memory lane  :)
 

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Re: Getting Horizontal

Post by ajduclos » Mon Nov 25, 2019 3:18 pm

Gyppo - once again you hit the nail squarely on the head.  Fabulous float.  Great meditation.  Very peaceful not being sold something for a few moments.  Time spent in one's head - after all, that's what writer do..............

Aj

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Re: Getting Horizontal

Post by Sharon Leigh » Sun Dec 01, 2019 1:43 am

 Hi Gyppo :) 

I adore this. So the whole is quite lovely, with its sinking into memory and music/melody, but the starting off with lying prone on the floor makes it just magical. There's something so elemental about lying flat on the ground or floor... I right away wondered, when's the last time I've done that?? A long time. Listening from that perspective must have been sublime, reading it from there certainly was; I think I have to try this. Yeah, my back and knees will protest. But the child in me says go for it! 

Ps, it may be overlooked in the fun of the whole write, but in S2 L2 you expressly say "listening" to old music without distraction of video...I felt this deeply! I've often sent music to my daughter, and when I do I always say to "listen the first few times without watching the video" because it must be experienced internally first without those external influences. I love this poem. I hope you are well :)
"This creature of the poem may assemble itself into a being with its own centrifugal force."-- Sharon Olds

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