Re: Her Incidental Garden
Posted: Sun Dec 30, 2018 7:15 am
Tracy Mitchell wrote: ↑Sat Dec 29, 2018 1:43 pmHi Marc -
What nice poem. I really like the craftsmanship evident in the lines.
My two cents is replace your title with "She Deserves More Credit", and then cut the first line. The second line seems a more interesting line with which to launch the poem.
As always, use or lose.
T
What an elegant solution. I've been scratching my head looking for a replacement for the line. Was leaning towards: She deserves more credit than I give her. I like your idea better. Though not sure about the title.
Phil made much the same suggestion- Thank you both.