Her Incidental Garden

[Marc Gilbert]

Hi Marc -

What nice poem. I really like the craftsmanship evident in the lines.
My two cents is replace your title with "She Deserves More Credit", and then cut the first line. The second line seems a more interesting line with which to launch the poem.

As always, use or lose.

T

What an elegant solution. I've been scratching my head looking for a replacement for the line. Was leaning towards: She deserves more credit than I give her. I like your idea better. Though not sure about the title.

Phil made much the same suggestion- Thank you both.

[Tracy Mitchell]

Phil made much the same suggestion-

Ooops. I should read the previous comments.