Aspirations

[Matty11]

Thanks Trev. The first version has a syllabic pattern 2/4/6/8/6/4/2. The second version is a stress pattern, tetrameter with rhyme. Not sure which I prefer, perhaps an extension of the succinct form is an option, but essentially I feel it is a matter of taste (as always).

cheers

Phil

[Eric Ashford]

This abstract poem works for me, and I don't need to understand it all. Its one of those writes that you have to eat the whole apple or not. I chose the former, and felt the flow of time in its parts as you developed the memories stringing them together. Some memorable lines also. Enjoyed.

[Matty11]

Thank you for your encouragement Eric.

Cheers

Phil

[Eric Ashford]

The hope of fools and the faith of angels both reflected so well here! Well said.