Broken Wheels. By Brian Humeniuk alias Granda

[Granda]

Heyyy. Less of the Gramps sonny. I may be old but I can still kick your arse with my cane. 

Thanks CP. 

[Dave]

Hey Brian. This is touching but needs editing IMO.
Why not say grandson in L1 instead of the boy? There is no need for leisurely in L2 as a stroll is per its nature leisurely.
And then there is the problem of the posts which seem to gleam and grin. Posts grin?
In S4 i would lose line 2. Too many hands.

[Granda]

Hey Dave. Good points. I agree about the 'leisurely', but not the hands. The hands are a juxtaposition of my hands and his. Same with the boy. I am he but also me from years ago. I probably just need to write it 'betterly'.