“hahaha, the man is alive”
flying, diving, crashing --
yet he comes up and does another
lining up all of the shots
down one goes in rapturous glee
“oh, what a jolly good show”
popping pilots into splotches in the sky
mixing the streaks of white
into a red smudge
crumpled up ones not worth a hundred
cracking up with delight
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Re: Shots
This feels very exciting with action, drama and psychology. I'm not sure I'm inside it, in terms of what is exactly going on. Maybe back the lens up just a smidge.greenbean wrote: ↑Sun Sep 16, 2018 8:57 am“hahaha, the man is alive”
flying, diving, crashing --
yet he comes up and does another dive? line of cocaine?
lining up all of the shots booze? drugs? bullets?
down one goes in rapturous glee
“oh, what a jolly good show”
popping pilots into splotches in the sky war?
mixing the streaks of white
into a red smudge
crumpled up ones not worth a hundred
cracking up with delight