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A Brief Glimpse

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Gyppo
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A Brief Glimpse

Post by Gyppo » Mon Oct 14, 2024 12:35 pm

A Brief Glimpse

A rippling stream of lights,
at  different heights.
About a dozen of them,
moving past my uncurtained window 
with a bouncy gait.
Some pure white, 
most LED blue or green.

A brief WTF moment,
then it clicked.

The local runners' group, 
hardly noticed in daylight,
becoming a luminescent serpent,
a chain of irregular links,
as the evenings close in.

Gyppo
I've been writing ever since I realised I could.  Storytelling since I started talking.  Poetry however comes and goes  ;-)

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Marc Gilbert
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Re: A Brief Glimpse

Post by Marc Gilbert » Thu Oct 17, 2024 9:05 am

Hey Gyppo,

I've been lurking around hidden and was not going to post anything before coming up with an excuse for my absence that paints less of an asshole than I am. But I read this and have to comment. 

It's light and delightful and fully realizable. 

I don't know what to say about this:

"becoming a luminescent serpent,
a chain of irregular links,
as the evenings close in"

other than, "Yes!"

Anyway, Thanks for the great read.
"Poetry is not speech raised to the level of music, but music brought down to the level of speech." - Paul Valery

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Re: A Brief Glimpse

Post by Gyppo » Thu Oct 17, 2024 11:48 am

You're welcome, Marc.

It was just one of those little moments which cried out to be captured.  I was busy working on something else, saw the lights passing by, opened a spare document, captured it whilst it was still fresh, saved it, and went back to what I was working on.  

If I'd told myself I'd remember and do it later it would probably never have happened.

Gyppo
I've been writing ever since I realised I could.  Storytelling since I started talking.  Poetry however comes and goes  ;-)

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