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indar
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by indar » Thu May 23, 2024 11:24 am
Dinner
Bixby Bridge unfurls.
Beneath, land gives way to inlet sea.
The trail rolls on,
hills unfold.
The clouds ahead do not change.
Two brothers share color crayons
in the dining car.
The waiter inquires
if we have further needs.
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Gyppo
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by Gyppo » Tue Jun 18, 2024 12:31 pm
Indar,
This paints a delightfully gentle image of a small moment in time on a journey. Just a handful of specific images let the reader fill in the rest from their own travelling experiences.
Gyppo
I've been writing ever since I realised I could. Storytelling since I started talking. Poetry however comes and goes
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