The Tangled Branch Discussion Forums

Thanks, Linda. I think Tracy may have commented as well, but I was too distracted by his most recent avatar.

https://visuwords.com/

Is a cool, visual way to explore the relationships between words.

It's built on Princeton's WordNet:

https://wordnet.princeton.edu

I find just playing with the words leads down some interesting paths.

T, L.2 -> neither does it rise, but it doesn't stop anyone from using it. :)  just playing. This is more wordplay than poem, but fun. I chose sat for the obvious alliteration and my unshakable predisposition toward sibilance and alliteration and I think it reinforces the indifference. Tim, Thanks fo...

I said “good morning” to the sun
and it sat there shining
indifferent to the earth and hour
and I, a brick to be used or not 
then crumble, thought for a time 
below its hot and careless gaze.

Nothing here, but appreciation for a good read. Can't say enough good things about the close of the poem.
 

Dave,

Quick reply to your reply. This one is taking time to digest and deserves more than a quick "I like it" kind of response.

A still digesting,

Marc

Indar, Can't tell you how much I like and how effective the words of the final two stanzas are. The juxtaposition of the extraordinary subject and the ordinary shelf is beyond powerful. A minor suggestion would be a break in S4 after "ground". The length of the line gives it disproportionate visual ...

Tim,

What an effective and powerful poem. No nits here. It connects the personal and universal seamlessly. To call it a pleasure to read would be wrong. It's not a pleasant poem, but it made me think, and reflect, and definitely touched a nerve.

Thank you for posting it.

Marc

Sharon,  I love reading your work. I think your use of enjambment is exceptional and educational. That said, the breaks in here: where bodies filled and fitted. If I were  a medium or an indigo child, I'd be overwhelmed, read a story with each pass  of hand, fingertips on denim, cashmere.  Don't fee...

Thank you, David.