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- Sun Dec 09, 2018 3:04 pm
- Forum: The Commons
- Topic: Reservations
- Replies: 3
- Views: 10636
- Sun Dec 09, 2018 11:47 am
- Forum: Post Your Poems
- Topic: He Who Knows
- Replies: 14
- Views: 9256
Re: He Who Knows
Just getting reacclimated and stumbled upon this gem. I think the poem is much more than entertaining, though entertaining it is. YOur word choice do a great job of keeping the poem from sounding like prose. I like the poem as a whole but simply love the last 4 lines. Great to read your work again, ...
- Sun Dec 09, 2018 11:37 am
- Forum: Post Your Poems
- Topic: Classroom (revised)
- Replies: 21
- Views: 14105
Re: Classroom (revised)
revision My old teacher, telling lewd jokes to mallards, wears a feathered hat. The sign says 'Do not feed the ducks' but life for him does not change overnight. He shares forbidden bread. I let him be. original My old teacher, telling lewd jokes to mallards, wears a feathered hat. The sign says ' ...
- Sun Dec 09, 2018 11:25 am
- Forum: Post Your Poems
- Topic: loose clockwork
- Replies: 15
- Views: 10720
Re: loose clockwork
The minutes on the hour hand slip. Hold my hand but take yours when you need. Have my hand I don't need it back. To slip isn't to fall. Ski in the snow. I like this. The length of the opening line and its juxtaposition in structure from the remaining lines suggests the slippage. Two small suggestio...
- Mon Feb 05, 2018 5:55 pm
- Forum: Post Your Poems
- Topic: Come Autumn
- Replies: 7
- Views: 5624
Re: Come Autumn
Thanks, Dave,
God stuff and useful. As always, I appreciate the thoughtfulness and valuable feedback.
Marc
God stuff and useful. As always, I appreciate the thoughtfulness and valuable feedback.
Marc
- Sun Feb 04, 2018 4:10 pm
- Forum: Post Your Poems
- Topic: Come Autumn
- Replies: 7
- Views: 5624
Re: Come Autumn
Thank you for the kind comments, Janet. The whole poem has something to do with deferred rewards that may never come or something like that. Sometimes a line just comes and then I try and build a poem around it. This is one of those cases. I've learned (with some help from the folks here) that often...
- Sun Feb 04, 2018 3:13 pm
- Forum: Post Your Poems
- Topic: Come Autumn
- Replies: 7
- Views: 5624
Come Autumn
I shun the sun for a bright tomorrow and plow dry fields. There are orchards in the not too distance and a stream behind to mock my sweat. Come autumn, if I am able, I’ll see what the rains have blessed and the birds have left me. Then I’ll make my bed, should I see winter, under naked branches nea...
- Sat Feb 03, 2018 7:26 am
- Forum: Post Your Poems
- Topic: The Disappearance of the Modern American Male
- Replies: 24
- Views: 15873
Re: The Disappearance of the Modern American Male
Much enjoyed, no nits. Love the economic expression of so much.
Marc
Marc
- Sat Feb 03, 2018 7:24 am
- Forum: Post Your Poems
- Topic: Before I Summon the Eagle
- Replies: 19
- Views: 12774
Re: Before I Summon the Eagle
Janet, I enjoy reading this poem. I agree with David in wanting more of her and less of him. We all know him, or those like him pretty well. this line: "first is not an argument a grown|woman can make" seems a bit telly. I love this one: "His dreams draw line|in the carpet." and the ending. Maybe an...
- Sat Feb 03, 2018 7:18 am
- Forum: Post Your Poems
- Topic: Morning
- Replies: 12
- Views: 9308
Re: Morning
Thanks for the kind comments and suggestions.