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Hi Maggie,
Any friend of T's is very welcome here. 

Hi and welcome Shortcross, pull up a chair.

Hi and welcome July.
Post one of your recent poems here (in Post Your Poems) and we'll take it from there.
Looking forward to reading your stuff.
 

Loved this Marc.
The opening line set it up so well.
Very sad, and I'm sure most readers can identify with it.
 

Hi and Welcome Bev,
Looking forward to reading your scribbles 

Eyes are totally overrated! Look at an eye. It's cool. Now look at an eye that's been removed from a corpse...it looks exactly the same! It's the lids, lashes, brows and facial muscles that create the impression.  So I like the 'empty eye' line. And I always assumed that a ring implied conjugal righ...

Sharon Leigh wrote: ↑

Mon Jan 15, 2018 6:51 pm

Ha, Colm! Really it was an attempt to paint an old memory. Maybe I laid it on too thick

Thanks for looking in

Best,
S

No, you laid it well, got the balance right. You reminded me of what all those hundreds of girls must have been thinking about their lost chances with me 
It's good. 
 

Really enjoyed this.  Excuse my proposed edit. Unhinged and unhampered by locked doors                    The doors aren't just shut. And 'sanity' isn't required IMO. and safe rooms I will write their names in chalk         or chisel them in concrete.       He'll be ok, or will kill again (of course...

Being a bone marrow biopsy 'survivor' I can empathise with the poor creature being skewered. You've set the scene, but I'd liked to have 'felt' something more. I think, with a line or two, or even a word or two, you could have given more depth. I do like this.  Actually after reading again I think t...

Hi and Welcome Heidi