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Welcome Heidi!! Glad you could make it!

Nice work, last time I attempted a pantoum I was left looking alopecic :shock: I like the angle, as a reader I'd think initially from title and first lines that n was a female, so it was interesting and aligns w subject of course. Some places a bit trite for my taste (dreams, tinkling laughter, ench...

Thank you Colm, and...burnt?! Well I suppose it makes sense but, that's wild. Fascinating

Thanks also, Mark, for looking in and for your comments here

Best,
Sharon

Thank you Mark. No, I meant the sweater technique, but if it works in other ways, hey

Appreciate your looking in!

Best,
Sharon

Hi gaviano! Welcome, and glad you're here! Look around, have fun & I look forward to reading you!

Best,
Sharon

Thats another poem

Naw, just, the interesting thing (to me anyway) about it was, it was just this maybe 10-min conversation 30+ years ago and I still remember it/him in vivid color in my minds eye. And just had to try to capture that I guess. Too much expo on my poem now!

Absolutely do what's best for your poem, always! They were tiny matters, anyway, it's lovely overall. I'm glad to hear it sprung from NaPo! Would you believe I have never fully participated in it. For years I resisted out of some belief that I cannot force poetry, but, this year I intend to try. Wil...

Ha, Colm! Really it was an attempt to paint an old memory. Maybe I laid it on too thick

Thanks for looking in

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S

He watched her fade into the morning mist, its low lying sulk on the lake bled thinner across the road, then soft focused the shadowed pines <could remove "then"? freeze framed, until the day's virgin heat prompted their gentle swaying.   Dawn, the time for last chances, one more last chance. < clo...

Welcome welcome Reggie! So glad you're here with us.

S