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...and we appreciate you and so enjoy your writings and critical analysis... and are glad you are an aphant. 

Thanks for sharing.

Aj   

:D    And I think George Thorogood was ahead of the contagion mitigation curve with his song (surprise, eh?) "I Drink Alone" - solves the alcohol purification issue with the added benefit of social "dis-tancing" I drink alone, yeah, With nobody else You know when I drink alone, I prefer to be by mys...

I love it, Dylan.  What you do with rhyme and rhythm is splendid !!!!!

And, yes - apparently TP is the key !!!!!!

Aj  

Colm - really awesome and loaded write.  One pass through and it seemed clear to me..............  the depth, the awareness.   Speaks so clearly of times past and times present.  Well written.

Be well.

Aj

I like this very much, samwhool.
What if you simply remove the last 4 lines................... 

Aj

Nice bit of writing, Dave.  A topical topic well explored, nice imagery.  I'll leave critiquing of format to those who actually have a clue.

Aj
 

Thanks Dave - Yes, these lines work well as lyrics, given the stated form of this write is "Modern Ballad", a poetic form.  If it is bland it is because it is ballad, a story, not meant for intellectual dissection or filled with subtle hidden meanings.  It was meant to paint a clear and hopefully a ...

Thanks Aj. 'We consumed', is about our entire past history... it's what we've always done. Present tense 'swallow', was intentional; it's a quick/easy way of saying that we are still doing it... without having to use too many words :) I saw that as a possibility of what you were saying, but without...

Colm, thanks again.  Yes, my brain works in rhymes and rhythms... heck, sometimes when I'm out walking I even find myself counting steps ( don't tell the men in the white coats !!!).  But I have written free form and will again, good to practice and exercise the brain.  At least my prose is not fill...

I like this, Colm.  Nice lead-in to the meat re the first two stanzas - disagree (Linda) that the first two stanzas are throat clearing, but rather table setting. We, as a supposed sapient race, have for thousands of years created our gods in our "image and likeness."   Agree with Tim, tense in S4 -...