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- Fri Nov 02, 2018 9:45 pm
- Forum: Post Your Poems
- Topic: Predicted weather
- Replies: 16
- Views: 10593
Re: Predicted weather
Hey Colm Personally i could do without S1. It seems overly dramatic compared to the rest. Alomost like another poem. Besides if it circles above you where do the multiple shadows come from? And maybe i am dumb but i cant fit the handshake to either the circling or or the shadows or weather. The oth...
- Fri Nov 02, 2018 9:34 pm
- Forum: Post Your Poems
- Topic: error
- Replies: 6
- Views: 6178
Re: Memories
They grew from nutrients in the soil; I'd see that as 'returning' to the soil?
OK, they weren't actual leaves in the soil...but we are allowed a certain amount of poetic licence
OK, they weren't actual leaves in the soil...but we are allowed a certain amount of poetic licence
- Fri Nov 02, 2018 9:20 pm
- Forum: Post Your Poems
- Topic: Remembering the Dead
- Replies: 17
- Views: 10131
Re: Remembering the Dead
Strange 'Linda' poem...'dry humping' :shock: But excellent. All those fab, funny, gentle dead are eclipsed by the bad (dead) ones..their terrible legacies live on. And the loss of respect, loutish behaviour of the currently 'living' people are there too. I see both of these, not sure if that was ...
- Fri Nov 02, 2018 8:56 pm
- Forum: Post Your Poems
- Topic: error
- Replies: 6
- Views: 6178
Re: Memories
Have to (partially) disagree Dave. Probably because it's the way I write. It's a poem on a theme, does what it says on the tin in a, with unique/inventive language. However, it might be improved (and you'll see less of a list) by the omission of S3 and 4. Apols for talking over you AT. What say yo...
- Fri Nov 02, 2018 8:29 pm
- Forum: Post Your Poems
- Topic: There is a Planet Out There Where it Rains Glass
- Replies: 17
- Views: 11062
Re: There is a Planet Out There Where it Rains Glass
Fab poem Tim. A wonderful example of the power of showing (as opposed to telling). It's a real treat. I hope you weren't setting us up for this by throwing in a few 'experimental' poems...and then WHAM, hit us with this curved ball :) Either way, thanks for posting this. I wonder if your two prev...
- Thu Nov 01, 2018 9:20 pm
- Forum: Post Your Poems
- Topic: error
- Replies: 6
- Views: 6178
Re: Memories
Like this one too. Suggested edits to consider. When summer transitions, leaves return to soil, in coiled in foetal positions. Great opening S. Rain, taps in arid valleys Love this S, assuming 'taps' is a verb maybe consi...
- Thu Nov 01, 2018 8:49 pm
- Forum: Post Your Poems
- Topic: error
- Replies: 2
- Views: 3454
Re: Shoulders
I want to wear someone else’s shoulders. To stand in front of the mirror and let them hang, until the broad blades cut into the bow of my back. I want to recite a litany of lost causes, as the blood merges at the soles of my feet. Re-learn rejection, the dire thrill of resignation. The grief of a t...
- Wed Oct 31, 2018 8:19 pm
- Forum: Post Your Poems
- Topic: An angel from heaven
- Replies: 1
- Views: 1893
Re: An angel from heaven
Not sure who I should address, SaroLee or Delores?
Either way please read the advice here...as I've suggested before!
viewtopic.php?f=265&t=529
Especially #5.
Either way please read the advice here...as I've suggested before!
viewtopic.php?f=265&t=529
Especially #5.
- Tue Oct 30, 2018 8:29 pm
- Forum: Post Your Poems
- Topic: God
- Replies: 14
- Views: 9134
Re: God
Like it Tim.
I know it's a novel way to do it...but find 'he/she said' mid speak a bit distracting.
I assume it's a way of pulling the reader in as an actual observer, and on reflection it kind of does...but.
Anywho, I'm sure your green shirt looks fab
I know it's a novel way to do it...but find 'he/she said' mid speak a bit distracting.
I assume it's a way of pulling the reader in as an actual observer, and on reflection it kind of does...but.
Anywho, I'm sure your green shirt looks fab
- Mon Oct 29, 2018 8:59 pm
- Forum: Post Your Poems
- Topic: Some Things are Missing from Gloria's Marriage
- Replies: 2
- Views: 2297
Re: Some Things are Missing from Gloria's Marriage
Not always the man's fault. We have a crude saying here...'Sometimes it's like throwing sausages up O'Connell Street!' :lol: Who are they talking to? Not very loyal to each other...maybe say 'think/thinks'? Or maybe the fact they're so disloyal to each other, and can't talk to each other, is what'...