Thanks for coming back Trish. I'll have a ponder, though the expression is that of the speaker and pitches her 'comfort habit'.
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Phil
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- Fri Jan 17, 2020 1:43 am
- Forum: Post Your Poems
- Topic: Island Fiction
- Replies: 18
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- Thu Jan 16, 2020 10:24 pm
- Forum: Post Your Poems
- Topic: Aspen Sisters
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Re: Aspen Sisters
Yes, lovely write T. So heart-warming I feel you could cut from the separateness of observatonal simile to direct metaphor: Their strawberry blonde hair swirled when they were together, as if it were a single burgeoning mass of leaves. The way each stood straight and tall their entire lives, they se...
- Thu Jan 16, 2020 9:32 pm
- Forum: Post Your Poems
- Topic: Island Fiction
- Replies: 18
- Views: 12430
Re: Island Fiction
Thanks P, Sharon, Dave and Trish. Pleased you all found something in this attempt. I could murder a cuppa, I found a little over-familiar The intention was to convey the mundane, though there was a clearer intent to suggest repressed emotions in another version I have so perhaps it is a bit of a lef...
- Thu Jan 16, 2020 9:20 pm
- Forum: Post Your Poems
- Topic: Big Orange Sun
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Re: Big Orange Sun
hi Trish, I like the ambition in the imagery, but I'm not quite connecting to the theme. The 'drudgery' listed is rejected for a more 'ardent' life, but then 'serenity' is the opening image? Even the ardent cadavers cemented under glass: entwined lovers, frightened horse, chained dog, have more life...
- Wed Jan 15, 2020 1:34 am
- Forum: Post Your Poems
- Topic: Island Fiction
- Replies: 18
- Views: 12430
Re: Island Fiction
Thanks for the thumbs up on that G. I wanted that one to work to contrast with the 'binding' of knitting.
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Phil
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Phil
- Mon Jan 13, 2020 9:34 pm
- Forum: Post Your Poems
- Topic: A poem that lost its voice
- Replies: 5
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- Mon Jan 13, 2020 8:18 pm
- Forum: Post Your Poems
- Topic: Chaser Cairn
- Replies: 11
- Views: 7031
Re: Chaser Cairn
Neatly chained T. Particularly liked people holding to us/like the gravity of dead stars. and that striving toward mirrored bits of sky.
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Phil
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Phil
- Mon Jan 13, 2020 8:05 pm
- Forum: Post Your Poems
- Topic: Double locking. (A lighter moment.)
- Replies: 5
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Re: Double locking. (A lighter moment.)
Hi G., A bit like Wren, and despite the disclaimer, my thoughts wandered beyond the lighter moment to that locked-in aspect of N. and father - the not one to mess with. And then to the vulnerability of 'pensioners'. The childhood reference to end on was nicely light, but also nudged to light...
- Sun Jan 12, 2020 11:22 pm
- Forum: Post Your Poems
- Topic: Island Fiction
- Replies: 18
- Views: 12430
Re: Island Fiction
Yes, it is Wren. Thank you for that thumbs up on the final line. A dud concluding line can kill the whole poem!Assume purling is the verb,
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Phil
- Sun Jan 12, 2020 11:19 pm
- Forum: Post Your Poems
- Topic: Island Fiction
- Replies: 18
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Re: Island Fiction
Thanks for coming back Colm. Yes, the distinctions between simple and limiting have an individual consequence as are those 'progressions' outside tradition.
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Phil