Like the delivery Linda, it doesn't falsify or overdramatize. The key words are prize/object and when that translates to the reality of summer spent with his son - an exit. An appetite/anger for a custody battle, but not motivated by love. Sad indeed.
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Phil
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- Sun Mar 22, 2020 4:11 am
- Forum: Post Your Poems
- Topic: The Winner
- Replies: 8
- Views: 6357
- Fri Mar 20, 2020 12:52 am
- Forum: Post Your Poems
- Topic: Mrs Shakespeare Plots
- Replies: 3
- Views: 4283
Re: Perfidy
Thanks Linda and Colm. The poem is about a wife poisoning her husband or at least thinking about it. The style is parody, with a few nods to the Bard...Lear, R&J, and Hamlet. So yes, some 'ye olde English' crime entertainment
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Phil
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Phil
- Thu Mar 19, 2020 11:22 am
- Forum: Post Your Poems
- Topic: Mrs Shakespeare Plots
- Replies: 3
- Views: 4283
- Thu Mar 19, 2020 11:18 am
- Forum: Post Your Poems
- Topic: this ones called Cynthia
- Replies: 9
- Views: 9814
Re: this ones called Cynthia
hi
I agree with Linda that you have tapped into a situation with which many will connect. The use of repetition in the context is effective. I liked the ending. There was a poignancy in the wished for as opposed to the hard reality.
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Phil
I agree with Linda that you have tapped into a situation with which many will connect. The use of repetition in the context is effective. I liked the ending. There was a poignancy in the wished for as opposed to the hard reality.
best
Phil
- Tue Mar 17, 2020 3:42 pm
- Forum: Post Your Poems
- Topic: My God
- Replies: 12
- Views: 21265
Re: My God
I like this a lot Colm. It's personal, but not exclusive. Sleep rewires an unsettling sense of rebirth............lovely use of connect with rewires and we still wake surprised. Each night I grave in swaddled sinks, .............................. grave felt a forced verb settle deeper as hands clasp...
- Thu Mar 05, 2020 5:52 am
- Forum: Post Your Poems
- Topic: Steps, revisited
- Replies: 8
- Views: 12830
Re: Steps, revisited
Enjoyed the rhythms. On the edit side, maybe cut the last line, and use the title loss to frame a context.
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Phil
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Phil
- Sat Feb 29, 2020 12:46 am
- Forum: Post Your Poems
- Topic: True Story
- Replies: 21
- Views: 28245
Re: True Story
Apologies...I've been reading too much crime fiction...
- Sat Feb 29, 2020 12:39 am
- Forum: Post Your Poems
- Topic: Tools
- Replies: 5
- Views: 8925
Re: Tools
Thanks Indar, Colm and poet-e. Pleased you enjoyed. I cut down a small white birch tree to use as a display in a gift shop I once owned. It was in an area scheduled to be cut back by the state department anyway. The following spring, there in my shop, its trunk held in a dry container it budded out....
- Wed Feb 26, 2020 10:31 pm
- Forum: Post Your Poems
- Topic: Enough
- Replies: 25
- Views: 25742
Re: Enough
Excellent T. Can feel the bravery and hear the 'slam'. The sound is in the act. There is a defining humanity - and I would say respect - that the necessary, but utilitarian clothing cannot take away.
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Phil
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Phil
- Wed Feb 26, 2020 5:05 am
- Forum: Post Your Poems
- Topic: True Story
- Replies: 21
- Views: 28245
Re: True Story
Insightful comments by Dave and Tracy. It is a poem that resonates and triggers thoughts. On a mundane note I wondered who took the 'treasured' items! I suspect Rita :D I wondered if you could work the title more, the poems rings true without that title, but then I suppose you don't want to restrict...