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Hi (and HNY) ike, Sorry to say this makes no sense. Maybe you could give me some idea of what it's trying to say.  The last two stanzas might seem to conclude it...but I'm scratching my head.  I think you're trying to be too clever with wordplay. Actually I can understand it...but there's so little ...

https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Billy_Collins C'mon Colm--he is half Irish-- get off yer prosaic pulpit and read some of his stuff---he's a poet--period :D :D Never heard of the man. Googled. and am impressed.  Funny thing is the first poem I read was The Revenant. And the last two lines made me laug...

1st poem of 2019 Marc.
Hope the coming year is less grim; but I'm not expecting it to be better than the previous one 
No crits here. I enjoyed the read...it's a compact little gem.
HNY to you and ALL here in TTB 

The one on the facing page, however, who looks at me over her bare shoulder, cannot hide the shadow of annoyance in her brow. You have interrupted me, she seems to be saying, with your coughing and your loud music. Now leave me alone; let me finish whatever it was I was doing in my organza-trimmed ...

Fascinating, Colm -- a very instructive exercise. What do you take from it? What should we take from it? Is there a line between prose and poetry? How important is it to find and define that line? Just asking. T On MWC it was said by a few people that we can't call ourselves poets. We can't just wr...

Not convinced the repeating lines at the ends of S1 and 2 are needed. As I read these stanzas I believed what you were saying, but these lines read like you doubted the preceding stanzas would be believed?  That aside, I like this so much. It resonates with me, it reminds me about the power of fear....

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Sun Dec 30, 2018 2:35 am

Wow being a bit prickly. Love the poem if that helps

Being prickly...seriously? That's a bit rich coming from you

In the nit department. my only recommendation is to consider whether the poem may be advanced by deleting S.2 L.1., and then a period after 'revelation'. Hi Tracy, Good to see you back  :) I suppose it's obvious that they're always there and it's potentially a redundant line.  I think the idea was ...

There is hybris in the belief we could have been better than we are and if humans were sheep they would be, well, sheep. As for gods and politicians being to blame that's just too easy. I am a great admirer of humans among others and they certainly have their faults as other species do. I'm not goi...

Thanks for reading and your comments Dave.
I disagree with everything you said...although we never totally agree anyway