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An interesting thought, I've never considered the similarities between gut & grey matter! Well wrought, av, with a pleasing pace. Love the juxtaposition of Cosmo magazine/university degrees as both "empty calories"

Hi av... Really like this study of instinct, well-wrought and no bumps. L3 "beady eyes" a tad tired, so that I almost skim there, though. Maybe "dark seed eyes" or something like (which I've seen too of course, just not as much) Although I've personally no fear of crows (I actually adore birds, all ...

Mark, I'm liking this... It's fun to follow, pulls the eye smoothly down the page, a feast of device as you go. It's handled well and not obtrusive. That the author had fun writing it is evident, despite the negations between. The conclusion is soothing after the smorgasbord of the earlier stanzas. ...

T, I do think it's stronger in places for your edits, but (and this might sound odd) I miss the words "it left" after "smoldering void". I'm not sure I can explain exactly why, it just seems to bring a sad permanence. Not a fan of "gaped". This of course is just me, so please bring in other opinion ...

Welcome, welcome Jameson, to TTB. Glad you've made your way here!

Marcel, welcome to The Tangled Branch! Please to have you among us.

Thank you for sharing this, Gyppo. Some excellent, encouraging advice!

Hello Biola, and welcome! Glad you've made it here

Welcome Tanglepuss! Any friend of Tracy's is okay in my book! Great to have you among us.

.. In the afternoon, around two or three I sometimes remember When my body was split down the middle by a flaming sword - a shiver of lightning the smoldering void it left in the shape of you to pour yourself into but you never did. It happened many seasons ago. My trunk with its twisted form is st...