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Very much enjoyed Colm. Perspectives, inside/outside, invite the reader to reflect on insistence/acceptance/resistance. A rewarding and resonant read.

Phil

Good one. Quite like Tracy's suggestion. You may consider ditching the 'dreaming' context and just take a flight with angels.

Phil

Excellent Dave

As always Jackie, a freshness of approach, that made the assertions that more compelling. Hold me less precious in your hands and see as awards this dappling, this graying I have become. Yes, there is beauty in truth for both. Give me space to open my arms. I can hear the breathing in that release. ...

Hi Dave

A consensus on the standout lines, particularly liked the arched brows. I don't think you need the last verse.

Phil

as heavy as baby mice now that is an analogy that impacts!

Nice reflective one Marco. I can relate to that walk, though espaliered ambushed (probably due to the limits of my vocab).

Phil

Thanks Trev. Plenty to ponder on there.

all the best

Phil

Good one Trev. The woman rushing out in her dressing gown...yep, seen that! Like the fish gulp. Like the rock/hat I feel you could work the disposal parallels more with the coffin image. hardened ...my bin men are more varied...cheery, in a rush, have a muscular vitality...one label feels unfair Phil