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Thanks P.

Yes, relations between those that matter as opposed to that insistent world of voices that say they matter more or as much.

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Phil

Hi Poet, The poem does convey a sense of feeling beaten-up in its pounding, driving sounds. There is no sense of release - the fact of the 'moment' ironically reinforces that truth because it is only a moment. I don't feel you have overcooked the alliteration, which is easily done and can overwhelm ...

The cosy rooms do not become timeless, removing clocks is just a childish gesture, but being carefree frames our happiness. And sharing space - a spicy spaghetti in bed, a bubbly bath - both knowing closure adds up in maths. And cuddling on the settee, our telly habitat a diet of repeats, a brimming...

"Narcissism" along with "surreal" are two words that have been thrown around a lot lately. I didn't realise that Linda, though I am aware that Trump has been described as a narcissist. My context was more the 'creative' world than the political world. Obviously conceit/arrogance/vanity/narcissism a...

Neither an authentic personality but interested only in how they perceive themselves as being perceived. Exactly Linda, though I think I need to use my original title to define the relationship. What about the modern world causes so much narcissistic behavior if not the full blown personality disor...

This gaudy thing bobbing in burlesque offers a bawdy dance and even mimes some teasing slapstick fun. Her tinsel dreams of screen star fame faded with the talkies because her country accent was never posh. She strips without a blush. Hears the applause. I light a cigar for images say it best, like a...

Is S1 a quote Mark? I like the sonic thread of dirty/dignity/digitised/dead privacy as sinister as roses. - struggling with the image, though like the challenge, something to do with thorns/beauty/individuality? tyranny grinning in a plastic suit - like that one, but I don't feel the fascist line ad...

Enjoyed Dave. It does travel and keep the reader hooked, though there is always that option to limit the thought processes. <our identity was redefined by me as my definition of space, colour, Am I missing something there. with the use of punctuation? you are spaceless My personal preference would b...

hi Linda

Thank you for that link. Always instructive to listen to perspectives on history and its legacy in the contemporary world from exploited and oppressed people.

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Phil

Thanks Mark, Linda and Dave. I've tweaked the ending to be more pointed about gender. I'm wondering how 'screams' would work in place of 'begs' as the final word? Not sure Mark. May let the reader find the tone. I interpret this as not so much a specific god or person but the force that can inhabit ...